In this blog post I transformed a simple telling scene form within in my blog into a more descriptive showing scene.
Telling: I hit the gym and do whatever my crazy trainer has prepared for me.
Showing: I rushed out the house bragging my ten ton gym over my shoulder. My heart was pounding I could feel it in my stomach. Heart beating as fast as a bird in flight (which is 1000 beats per minute) as I sprint to the bus stop. I met the bus at the stop but it hardly waited and the strong smell of fuel followed it as it came to stop. When I arrived at the gym and opened the door another smell hit me, one that I don’t think I would ever get used to. A mixture of different body odors. As quick as the smell hit me so did my trainer, “WARM UP FOR TODAY IS FOUR EASY MILES AND 10 WIND SPRINTS”. It always amazed me how frequently he used the word “easy”, when he has yet to prove how easy it really is.
Telling: I hit the gym and do whatever my crazy trainer has prepared for me.
Showing: I rushed out the house bragging my ten ton gym over my shoulder. My heart was pounding I could feel it in my stomach. Heart beating as fast as a bird in flight (which is 1000 beats per minute) as I sprint to the bus stop. I met the bus at the stop but it hardly waited and the strong smell of fuel followed it as it came to stop. When I arrived at the gym and opened the door another smell hit me, one that I don’t think I would ever get used to. A mixture of different body odors. As quick as the smell hit me so did my trainer, “WARM UP FOR TODAY IS FOUR EASY MILES AND 10 WIND SPRINTS”. It always amazed me how frequently he used the word “easy”, when he has yet to prove how easy it really is.